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A good start. Looking forward to the next part.

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I enjoyed this thank you i

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Thank you for reading!🩶

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Interesting side note before I read this. Someone today was looking for good stories to read. Sadly I don’t think I liked her post, but I will check.

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This one is not a typical story of mine. It’s different and it still needs a lot of work (I might pull it off Substack for improvements, I’m genuinely sorry if this story disappoints you). I rushed publishing it. My other stuff is better.

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Strong writing. Really drew me in. Rooting for him to find a way …

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Powerful stuff! I particularly like the ambiguity of the ending. A lot of things could happen after this point. Will Sam have a redemptive experience? Unwittingly follow Ricky's example? Deliberately follow it? Lots of possibilities.

I also like the mythic imagery, like the sea as a mother that devours her children.

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