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Beautifully written pain and sadness.

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Thank you 🩶

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It's a beautiful, yet poignant story. That poor El.

It would make an epic quest, for someone to free her from time.

Or just one set of sympathetic eyes.

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Thank you…🩶

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Good read o

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Beautiful! Makes my 💜 ache....

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Hi

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Fascinating and entirely original.

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Thank you 🩶

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Good fiction.

Not enough Batman.

The logical structure of the story is a little nut*. Who, what, where, the time, powers, come from, how the power work, and why the sudden jump into a everyday life rather than gradual. But those are perfectly normal. It is a good nutty* story.

*Nut, things that make little to no sense but only in a good way.

** You are nuts but I am not. I am simply brilliant, genius, smart, intelligence, high abstract I.Q --

Yeah, it is a good story, nuff said.

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Well, it’s a flash fiction, I don’t have the strength for a whole short story now. Nuts? Because I just let it flow. No plot or plan. I think it has potential, because I can figure out the answers to all those questions, but…not today, not now. Too many projects, too little time.

Anyway, thank you.🩶

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This sounds like the beginning of something. A problem so painful it has to be solved. Could be epic. 🧐

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Thank you… I have so many unfinished/potential projects, might as well add this one to the pile.😂

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Might as well. Lol 😄 I’m the same. Too many stories, not enough time.

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Anger. Grief. Hardship. Sadness. Suffering.

All of them peppered with moments of reprieve spent in the company of the beloved. I know you challenged me with the line last week, but I feel this fits as an exploration of the idea of living between beauty and the pain better than my story was. Superbly done.

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It's like standing on the edge of a pool before you dive in - not quite knowing what it will be like when you're in there. I see from your posts there is more, I shal go off now to hear what they are being about.

And I wrote a little piece too, recently, about a witch.

(If fate means we have penises, of course, we are not called witches, even when we are really.)

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