Maybe rearrange these around a little or change the wording. Putting "lifeless" alone between commas, would make me think he dead, when that's not the case. On the brink, but not yet dead.
Unrelated: it's like Gema conveniently forgot that she has an identical twin that's near close enough to fool the entire court of her kingdom.
Oh ash you idiot
Cold, then hot as fire, then cold again. I swear a person could get a cold from Gemma.
Does she love him or not? Will she be able to overlook the test.
She should be glad that he didn't screw her to test her out.
Yanno?
Gaaaaah! No, Ash is a Snakeling. He wouldn’t dare.😅
Talk about hot and cold!!
This story's always fun. Of course I fall for the love-hate relationship.
Thank you for reading it.🩶
Loving this series more and more!!!
Beautiful, beautiful storyline. Excited to read more.♥️
Thank you.☺️
>There he lay, lifeless, barely breathing.
Maybe rearrange these around a little or change the wording. Putting "lifeless" alone between commas, would make me think he dead, when that's not the case. On the brink, but not yet dead.
Unrelated: it's like Gema conveniently forgot that she has an identical twin that's near close enough to fool the entire court of her kingdom.