Maybe I'm just dense, but she seems to care for him, I don't get why she objected. I've not a scrap of compassion for her, that said very good descriptions and world-building and characterization.
Well, if everything was clear and simple, there would be no point in going on with the story, wouldn’t it? 😉
She cares for him, but like a brother. She could agree to the union, but there’s this tiny little problem - the public consummation of the marriage. To marry her ‘brother’ and then sleep with him in front of the court? I don’t think any girl would be thrilled for such a wedding night.
My characters are never just good or bad. There’s always a hint of grey to them.
It's taken me some time to start getting caught up on my reading lately, but I'm glad an opportunity presented itself. This is a fantastic opening chapter. The chemistry between Auri and Marcian is fantastic, presenting us with a leading pair that are simultaneously very different, and very similar. The reveal at the end of this chapter is one which I saw coming, but this is a case where seeing the pieces fall into place ahead of time feels satisfying as opposed to disappointing, as it furthers one of the core conflicts at the heart of this story. So far, this is a wonderful follow-up to The Death of the Lake, and I'm looking forward to sinking my teeth into chapter 2.
A man should always marry his best girl-friend. This could be a very good story, and I can't wait to see how it turns out.
This is wonderful! The relationship between them is so heartfelt and genuine, of course making the event at the end that much more painful. Great job!
Thank you so much!🩶
Maybe I'm just dense, but she seems to care for him, I don't get why she objected. I've not a scrap of compassion for her, that said very good descriptions and world-building and characterization.
Well, if everything was clear and simple, there would be no point in going on with the story, wouldn’t it? 😉
She cares for him, but like a brother. She could agree to the union, but there’s this tiny little problem - the public consummation of the marriage. To marry her ‘brother’ and then sleep with him in front of the court? I don’t think any girl would be thrilled for such a wedding night.
My characters are never just good or bad. There’s always a hint of grey to them.
It could be worse, in her situation she’s being spoiled. But eh, what I think doesn’t matter with regards to your story.
As to them being grey I rarely see that in your stories as they seem pretty clear cut (just to offer a little more criticism).
It's taken me some time to start getting caught up on my reading lately, but I'm glad an opportunity presented itself. This is a fantastic opening chapter. The chemistry between Auri and Marcian is fantastic, presenting us with a leading pair that are simultaneously very different, and very similar. The reveal at the end of this chapter is one which I saw coming, but this is a case where seeing the pieces fall into place ahead of time feels satisfying as opposed to disappointing, as it furthers one of the core conflicts at the heart of this story. So far, this is a wonderful follow-up to The Death of the Lake, and I'm looking forward to sinking my teeth into chapter 2.